Indecision

She signaled steaming sentiments
I imagined implicated indications
She said she should share some secrets
I initiated indecisive insecurities.

I inquired innocence in intricacy               
She stood still sophisticatedly
I indulged intimately in it
She sanctioned same sentiments.

If I influenced indecent intentions
Should she share scorching sensation?
Improperly I imploded, in .. indecision
So she swallowed several streaming sins.

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This is an unedited 'experimental' post. If anyone has any correction to offer or want to add anything further is most welcome. I'm really looking for your feedback.
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26 Comments Add yours

    1. Neeraj says:

      Thank you. What you think about the poem? 🙂

    2. kalabalu says:

      It is difficult to understand..I need to read it again before I add my comment.

  1. kalabalu says:

    It was an invitation that was signaled as a feel
    I thought about the emotions, to me it was real
    I tried to tie and enter the paradise of her beauty
    my actions were not sinister, but I felt I did administer
    few touch, words and sight..a bit too much for consumption
    I felt..she did not think..I then had to let her off the link

    1. Neeraj says:

      Perfect.. you decoded it beautifully. 🙂

    2. kalabalu says:

      thank you..I finally understood 🙂

    3. Neeraj says:

      🙂 you’re welcome and thank you for sharing your poem. 🙂

  2. I love it. The pattern is beautiful, the encoded message gets the imagination flowing. I also love the poem by kalabalu. 🙂

    1. Neeraj says:

      Thank you very much for reading and sharing your feedback. Appreciated!!

  3. words4jp says:

    I really like the word play – very clever – a very clever way of describing someone not knowing how to proceed in regards getting to ‘know’ someone else.

    1. Neeraj says:

      It take guts to make that move. Isn’t it? 🙂

  4. silversun008 says:

    I like this. Especially that last line.

    1. Neeraj says:

      (smiles) thank you!!

  5. Chatty Owl says:

    I like the way you play with words here. Very very interesting and fun to read. But two last lines, well, the one before the last really, something’s off there and i cant put a finger on it as to why.

    1. Neeraj says:

      Is it the sudden change in the flow or the word ‘improperly’? I hated when it had to fall flat like this but had to do it ’cause I love the last line. *It’s a fiction though* 😀

    2. Chatty Owl says:

      I think its the “in indecision” that doesnt roll off my tongue as smoothly 🙂
      Fiction, huh.

    3. Neeraj says:

      ummm.. “Improperly I imploded, in.. indecision” will it work if I put a comma after imploded and a little pause after ‘in’ or “Improperly I imploded immensely” will be better? What you think?

      yes ‘a fiction’ Lol 😉

    4. Chatty Owl says:

      Yes, comma and pause! Because i like “indecision”, you shouldnt change it.

    5. Neeraj says:

      Changes implemented. Thank you!!! 🙂

  6. Matrone Bell says:

    There is always an underlined sensuality to your posts, I like the way you subtly weave in giving the reader just a glimpse and leaving the rest to their imagination.

    1. Neeraj says:

      Thank you if you think so 🙂

  7. web page says:

    Your style is very unique compared to other people I’ve read stuff from. Many thanks for posting when you have the opportunity, Guess I’ll
    just book mark this blog.

    1. Neeraj says:

      Your feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

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